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Re: The Deconstruction of Falling Stars
The Deconstruction of Falling Stars As the cradle gently rocks and the fire starts to grow Let ashes turn to ashes Let the wind begin to blow Time and time ...
Apr 21, 2008 -
Re: October Afternoons
Wow, after all these long and detailed reviews I come along with my shrunken opinion. I really like the ideas discussed in this story, memory and the passage of time ...
Apr 21, 2008 -
Re: Ragnarok
This was a very well written story. The imagery was very beautiful and I liked it a lot. However, I never understood if this was a girl in a post-apocalyptic ...
Apr 21, 2008 -
Re: Sight.
This was a very moving story. The feelings of the narrator were well-conveyed and I liked that. Have you considered using more well-developed paragraphs perhaps? That might make the story ...
Apr 18, 2008 -
Re: Cirque du Abberations
I liked this. Even with the grammatical errors and such it was a sound story. I only wish that you had continued with it rather than bringing it to such ...
Apr 18, 2008 -
Re: Encantado Pt. 2
Judy went over to Pete and started to help him away. Niles hesitated, but then he saw the faces of the people. They wanted no part of them. This superstition ...
Apr 18, 2008 -
Re: Encantado Pt. 1
Encantado The large boat sat moored on the north bank of the Amazon. The town spilled its light down onto it. The dark rainforest surrounded both the boat and the ...
Apr 18, 2008 -
Re: Deleted
This was a very interesting story, to say the least. I rather liked the main character. He seemed to have a genuine realness to him, if you'll pardon the redundancy. ...
Apr 17, 2008 -
Re: The Rose
The Rose It sat in one corner of the park. It sat untouched by the playful rampages of the children. Most plants on that playground didn’t last for very long ...
Apr 17, 2008 -
Re: Laurel's Lament
I liked it better than I thought I would at first. You started off with Laurel down on everybody and had me expecting an ending quite different than the one ...
Apr 17, 2008 -
Re: Lit
You reviewed one of my stories so I decided to return the favor. I really don't understand what this is about. Just what is Set out to do, and why ...
Apr 17, 2008 -
Re: Doble Cara
This is an okay poem, imho the only thing that turns me off is all the anger and resentment towards love. That's a personal thing though. Maybe expounding on the ...
Apr 17, 2008 -
Re: Favorite Form of Procrastination?
Video games, big time also music and internet, but not as much as video games particularly Halo 3 and Guitar Hero 3, pure awesome distilled into entertainment.
Apr 17, 2008 -
Re: Do you carry a notebook with you?
I can't imagine going anywhere without a notebook. Any little idea I have gets scribbled down, no matter what it is or where I am. Though when you're going down ...
Apr 17, 2008 -
Re: Pretty Butterfly
Pretty Butterfly Donald stood by the side of the road watching the supply trucks go past. Their exhaust hung heavy in the cold February air, creating a miniature cloud that ...
Apr 17, 2008
